[轉貼] 寫作上 COHERENCE 這些句子哪裡錯了？

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寫作上 COHERENCE 這些句子哪裡錯了？
本文章最後由 nov7 於 2009-9-30 17:24 編輯

寫作老師出了10個句子，以 COHERENCE 看要怎麼修改呢？
>> 後面是我自己改的，請大大幫我看看這樣改可以嗎？ 還是該怎麼做呢？有的我根本自己都看不出示哪錯了，就不知道怎麼改....  

1. To appreciate a Chinese poem, it should be read slowly.
>> To appreciate Chinese poem, it should be read slowly.

2. Before eating lunch, the table has to be cleared and cleaned.
>> Before eating lunch, the table must be clean up.

3. Mr. Presott founded the Flying Tiger Line, now the largest all-cargo airline in the world in 1945.
>> In 1945, Mr. Presott founded the largest all-cargo airline in the world is Flying Tiger Line.

4. He is not ambitious; he only expects a passing grade in every course.
>> He is not ambitious; he only expects to pass the grade in every course.


5. In studying English, pronunciation must be mastered.
>> Studying English, pronunciation should be mastered. (這樣改有差別嗎？@@")

6. Approaching the main gate, two stone lions were seen.
>> Approaching the main gate, two stone lions were been seen. (實在是很怪，什麼跟什麼文法都亂成一堆了...XD )

7. While walking on the street, attention must be paid to speeding cars.
>> While walking on the street, must pay attention must to speeding cars.(被動改主動，這樣有對嗎？)

8. After graduation from primary school, my father sent me to a private secondary school.
>> After graduation from primary school, my father sent me to a private secondary school. (這題看起來很正確啊...哪兒有問題了呢？)

9. Diana said in the afternoon she would invite me to tea.
>> Diana said, she would invite me to have a cup of tea in the afternoon.

10. Looking at a TV program, a mosquito bit me.
>> Looking at TV program, a mosquito bite me.

與看越暈............英文....寫作大不易啊！